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first poem ever (its not so good)
um well, this is the first poem I ever wrote, but it doesn't hafta do with God....I just wanted to write this I guess... it's a really weird poem, but i wrote it anyways. hope you like it...
Here goes:
Autumn
Crack, Crunch, Stamp
Leaves underfoot crunch like bones breaking, crunch crunch, telling you to watch out.
Leaves cover the ground, like an ocean of amber and brown, crackle crackle, inviting you to dive in
Trees stand tall and proud, their branches set ablaze in a wildfire of red leaves, rustle rustle, guiding you
The wind blows gently through your hair, like a soft hand of the Father patting your back, swish swish, pushing you the right way.
well that's it, first poem ever . pls give me feedback cuz i'd like 2 know wat u guys REALLY thot of it.
Here goes:
Autumn
Crack, Crunch, Stamp
Leaves underfoot crunch like bones breaking, crunch crunch, telling you to watch out.
Leaves cover the ground, like an ocean of amber and brown, crackle crackle, inviting you to dive in
Trees stand tall and proud, their branches set ablaze in a wildfire of red leaves, rustle rustle, guiding you
The wind blows gently through your hair, like a soft hand of the Father patting your back, swish swish, pushing you the right way.
well that's it, first poem ever . pls give me feedback cuz i'd like 2 know wat u guys REALLY thot of it.
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ILuvAnime
Re: first poem ever (its not so good)
I really like the last line So true
In His arms
I will rest safe
With this behind
Wrapped in His grace
I will rest safe
With this behind
Wrapped in His grace
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